This is my handmade manga. this manga is the reason i joined thecolorless. i have restarted my manga 3 times to improve it. i guess it's improving because some advices from CL people. especially i give my thanks for @eterno , @Momimochi , @Kuru , @Inasda , and also for all other CL members. ^^

Aito Yamagata is a student from the school in tokyo.but, he's never had any friends because people find it's hard to communicate with him, and he's never got a good grades at his school..
He's always bring his old skateboard everywhere because it feels lonely to him without it. but when he searching for magical spells on the internet, he found creatureworld.com and his computer exploded. he awaken on the different world.Creature world.
He met drake, A novelist from USA that who wrote the scenario of the creature world on the internet, but then the website taken by virus and dragged himself to his own story.
Drake told him to follow him to the "camp" and drake gave he a sword that can improve everytime he defeated a person.
he's in one tent with ogami fumiko, an elf girl that doesn't has any friends too.. so they made a friendship there and became a good friends.
He got a fight with Kittenhead for the test and he passed.
he help fumiko to regenerate the "unhealable" wound in her leg, so she can walk normally.but, aito feel the pain with him and he took a long sleep.
after he woke up, he took a practice with fumiko and he defeated an unexpected magician.
Before that, drake admit himself as the creator of that world and apologize to aito without telling him what was going to happen.
he met his classmate ramiza and he asked why does he is being hated in the school. ramiza can't explain and just shut up.aito got mad at her, but ramiza apologized to him.Aito can forgive her, day by day he became friend with ramiza.
he took a long adventure with his friends. along the journey,he noticed that fumiko always shut and doesn't smile even he cheer her up. she said that she has a secret that made her cannot smile.
after a long adventure with drake,ramiza, and fumiko, he found an enemy and defeat him alone,while his friend searching for the small base. aito doesn't defeat him till dead, so he's still alive.
after he called "first friend" by fumiko, fumiko disappeared.since she is his first friend, he feels that he must searche fumiko immediately. he's going to march to the main castle with his friends. but when he try to attack the defender of the castle gate, he almost hit by a soldier axe. but the enemy that aito just defeated saved him,and helped aito to attack the defender. when aito and his friend succeed to enter the castle, he's going to face the evil king.and the king is Ogami Fumiko.
he's going to forfeit that time, but he seen a strange vision and saw fumiko said "help me" in that vision.. after that he's back to conscious and going to face fumiko seriously. after fumiko defeated, he hugged her tightly and she said "this is my secret that you're looked for.i can't smile because i want to be with you forever, and being the kind person just like you all.." and then she died and vanished in aito's hand and he cried in front of his friends..
finally, he said farewell to the friends in the camp and to drake which going to back to USA after all the scenario of the world finished.and he goes back to the earth with ramiza.
he finally arrived in his bedroom and saw nothing happened to his computer. after that, he goes back to normal life and finally he's graduated from that middle school. because of ramiza is the only friend he has in tokyo, he feels lonely after know ramiza is going to go abroad and continue her school overseas.
and after he got to his new school, he met a girl and asked for her name. and the name of her was "Ogami Fumiko".

Character designs :
Aito Yamagata :

Ogami Fumiko :
Drake Whiterose:
Salbel Ramiza :

I'm asking for your advice, whether it's for my drawing style, or the story. maybe if it's finished i will make a webcomic.
i hope you enjoy the story!
-Shafnat Naufal-^^