Alright. Time for me to make my reviews. However, I am not planning to say anything good, well, except for a few stories. I will, however, talk about faults I saw. So you might be better of not reading this. ye have been warned. Also, yes, FUCKING SPOILERS.
@Cenica - "Grave Matters"
This is the prime example of how rushing fucks the story. The idea is interesting enough, but the execution is bad. Text feels really fragmented, even within the same paragraph. And from what I heard - initially that was just one mass of text with no separation, which would be totally impossible to read. Also, very abrupt ending, unsatisfying.
@hellstorm901 - "After the Fall"
This takes the prize as the weirdest idea of all. Also, this is the story that demands of you to re-read it with some sort of new understanding, to try and get it more. And at the same time the author himself doesn't give all the answers, forcing the reader to invent his own answers. Well, some people like that, some don't, so that may be both good and bad. However, the style is very heavy - phrases seem to wordy and hard to read sometimes. That lowers the re-read value.
@--Jack-- - "Stranded"
This one I liked. Very simple theme, very clean and good execution. A bit of a twist in the end. There was a small thing that caught my attention - at some point in the story it seems that the door opens inside the room, but after that the scene shows that the door swings outside it. I am not sure if that is a mistake or is it is supposed to be so. Also, the story is very short.
@johan_5179 - "Message"
This one seems like a proper thriller. I liked the style and the characters. I have to say, the words "Unapologetic Sluggishness" made my physically flinch. I was not sure what to think - is it a joke, what is it? So suddenly out of style with everything that came before. Turns out it was a twist, but it made me worry. Also, in the beginning, it seems like the criminal was something who is extremely, inhumanly strong... I suspected supernatural being at the start. But this was never addressed after.
@Kirn - "Peculiar Jake Morrier"
Oh, this one. Well, it's not horror, it's a thriller attempt. But the story got no suspense at all. The reader can see what will happen a mile away. This is the main problem. To name some others - bland narration until the very end, obvious closure scene with two cops, and the gore scene, it seems, tries to make up for all the uneventful time before it. Also - mistakes and typos.
@Kuroba_Loki - "What She Has Lost"
Okay... while reading this, for about six times I really wanted to jump and yell 'Stop! This is silly!' And it is fucking silly. This is not a horror, just some sort of abstract with all the horror cliche author could remember thrown into one pot and boiled down until all the taste was lost. Story? Story is lost in the midst of all this silliness. Also, adding wew, chains and yourself to the story is just plain bad taste and the author should bash his head against the wall for it.
@Noodle - "Case-R4114R"
Mixed feelings about this one. On one hand, I can see that the author had many ideas. The setting, the characters... it all took some imagining. On the other hand, it feels like the story was rushed and because of that many things are not explored nearly enough. Also, this is in no way a horror or even a thriller. This is a simple action, and I can point you to the similar action movies. Also, using deus ex machina plot device is usually frowned upon. And I do frown upon it.
@olivaisfire1997 - "Woods of Fate"
Again, simple and well-knows story. Guy finds girl in the woods, brings her home, falls in love, she is a monster. Could have been done well. The problem is style, and the story itself really feels just... cheesy, I guess. Can't really say anything else here. No, wait, I can! Narration. For some reason sometimes the narration is in past tense and sometimes - in the present tense.
@SlantDuffy - "Feeding the Pigs"
Some good gore, some good scenes, some poor pig. I guess, my biggest problem with this story was that I didn't really feel the motivation behind any of this. Why do character do what they do? Like there was this family, and then things went crazy with no explanation. Feels like the story was there only to support the gore ideas themselves. Also, some things, like deer anus or thoughts about energy conservation just feel out of place in the narration.
@Taro_Tanako "The Creeper"
You know, this might have been a gem. Honestly. There is an idea, there are characters, there's even a twist that throws the story from thriller to a horror in one sweep. While the idea isn't new, things like that can be made unexpected and the author did a good job of doing that. However, he rushed the thing, so it feels really unpolished. Some scenes could have been reviews, maybe the overall flow or pacing of the story... Still, it is a good story and I honestly expected something extremely worse from this one author.
@Ucui - "Welcome to Sunny Veil"
Again, mixed feelings. The writing is solid. The action is there, everything seems to be in place. And we end up with something that looks like the vampire mob outside the hotel... But no, it's citizens turning into clowns at night. Which pretty much offed the whole thing for me, because the while story is constructed upon some joke. I know, that clowns can be scary... but you really have to work hard to make them so. Also. Honking? Really? Feels like a Homestuck tribute, which is not a good thing in this case.
There we go... oh, before I forget!
and how he manipulates the conversation with Liz is a nice pointer to his hidden side.
You know, I really didn't intend for it to look like that. Just wrote that without thinking much about reasons, so you really give me too much credit. I have to say, that I am not the one for twists, so the story I made really is like that - everything happens straight. I guess, if the scene feels like that, I just got lucky with that )