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The Girl who traveled the Road to Darkness:
One day, a girl was born, and grew up to be a beautiful & respected woman.When she turned 20 she went to set out on a journey. Over the years on her journey, she had a breakdown of screams and tears. The cause was of how humans acted around her. Killings, death, wars, greed, hate, and pain: All the causes of her grief. This caused her to go insane, so to get rid of the stress, she tried many things: Music And Arts, candy, and even the happiness from her freinds, all the things she loved, but none of it worked. But later, while time still flowed, she started to used her own body. First, she tried cutting her hair, it wasnt much but it relieved her alittle. As a result she thought "If i keep cutting parts of my body, will this pain and greif i have, let up?". After she thought this she tried cutting her arm, and it relieved her alittle too, every time she cut it little by little. When she finished an arm, she lastly tried a leg, but this time it was weird. Nothing felt different. Anything else she cutted didnt get rid of some of her grief. Eventually she fell into more despair... and then eventually... died. But she left this message in replace of her to her family, "Did you know? My time has ran out?